Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38

Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38
Message de here4u posté le 01-09-2025 à 21:11:30 (S | E | F)
Hello dear Friends!

Another easy exercice that everyone can do!


Les vacances sont terminées, et nous reprenons doucement notre travail ! Courage !
Je sais que l'Expression libre est la compétence la plus difficile à bien acquérir dans l'apprentissage d'une langue, même si elle est notre langue maternelle, d'ailleurs...

Certains m’avaient dit être gênés d’exprimer des idées personnelles ( - ils avaient l’impression – souvent fausse – de les exprimer maladroitement ) Vous savez que je ne vous demande pas de " raconter votre vie " si vous ne le désirez pas... Je souhaite juste vous voir vous exprimer sur tout sujet aussi " librement " que possible.
De plus, je pense que vous aurez maintenant compris que pour moi, toute expression, même maladroite, est intéressante et a de la valeur. Elle nous stimule tous à " trouver mieux " !

Voici les questions auxquelles vous pourrez répondre :

1) Do you like gardening? What do you grow?

2) What is your best (or your worst) memory of school?

3) Do you believe in Astrology and Horoscopes?

4) What sort of restaurant is your favourite?

Vous pouvez répondre à 1 ou 2 questions au choix – en notant bien les références - et développer celle(s) que vous voulez, jusqu’à atteindre en tout un maximum d’environ 150 mots.

Envoyez-moi vos réponses en mp et je publierai une première série que vous 'corrigerez' (en bleu d’abord pendant deux jours) puis en vert… Une fois le premier texte corrigé au mieux, je publierai ensuite la deuxième série... (sans changements donc ! ) Vous gagnez de la liberté (celle de ne pas parler de plusieurs sujets, ceux qui ne vous " inspirent pas "... Vous écrivez la longueur que vous voulez, vous pouvez choisir d'inventer, de plaisanter, ou de répondre avec sérieux... Nous vous suivrons !

Cet exercice sera pour vous un ou en fonction de la qualité de vos écrits et des difficultés (surmontées) dans la prestation...

Cet exercice sera corrigé le vendredi 12 septembre 2025 ! Go for it! with THE FORCE.

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 02-09-2025 à 19:31:29 (S | E)
Hello dear friends!

Here is our first EXPRESSION of the school year!

ANSWER 1: TOPIC 2: 2) What is your best (or your worst) memory of school?
Please, indicate the possible mistakes and underline what looks clumsy to you.

I was in primary school and must have been about seven years old. My teacher was known to be strict. But this year, she was pregnant, often tired and irritable, not with most of the classroom, but always with the same little girl, shy, humble, always frightened. The teacher told off very often and one day, she grabbed the little girl by his hair and shocked her. I was feeling very, very bad, but I did not say anything, not even to my parents. I have never forgotten that and this is one of my worst memories of school.

for your help!

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 03-09-2025 à 12:17:50 (S | E)
Hello dears,

Wake up, please!

We have other ANSWERS in the waiting! A lot of work in perspective...

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de gerold, postée le 03-09-2025 à 17:53:46 (S | E)
Hello here4u!

ANSWER 1: TOPIC 2: 2) What is your best (or your worst) memory of school?
Please, indicate the possible mistakes and underline what looks clumsy to you.

This is a good text.

I was in primary school and must have been about seven years old. My teacher was known to be strict. But this year, she was pregnant, often tired and irritable, not with most of the classroom, but always with the same little girl, shy, humble, always frightened. The teacher told off very often (something missing?) and one day, she grabbed the little girl by his hair and shocked her. I was feeling very, very bad, but I did not say anything, not even to my parents. I have never forgotten that and this is one of my worst memories of school.

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de alouettelulu, postée le 03-09-2025 à 22:24:03 (S | E)
ANSWER 1: TOPIC 2: 2) What is your best (or your worst) memory of school?

Merci à Gerold pour ses indications. Voici ce que je propose pour corriger mon texte :

I was in primary school and must have been about seven years old. My teacher was known to be strict. But that year, she was pregnant, often tired and irritable, not with most of the pupils, but always with the same little girl, shy, humble, always frightened. The teacher told off her very often and one day, she grabbed the little girl by her hair and shocked her. I was feeling very, very bad, but I did not say anything, not even to my parents. I have never forgotten that and this is one of my worst memories of school.

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 03-09-2025 à 22:50:31 (S | E)
Hello Lulu thelark! I'll pluck you! (just kidding!)

Here, you're disobeying 2 rules...
- indications (mistakes) are blue, but 'suggestions' (corrections) are green.
- but most important: you mustn't give your corrections before due time! (2 days - especially as Magie is posting from the other side of the world! ) Then, only then and usually not before I gave my extra indications, are you allowed to 'suggest' in green...

Here is your (partly) corrected text with my own indications:

I was in primary school and must have been about seven years old. My teacher was known to be strict. But that year, she was pregnant, often tired and irritable, not with most of the pupils, but always with the same little girl, shy, humble, always frightened. The teacher told off her very often and one day, she grabbed the little girl by her hair and shocked her. I was feeling very, very bad, but I did not say anything, not even to my parents. I have never forgotten that and this is one of my worst memories of school.

A good text, indeed!

No hard feelings, Alouette... but please, don't correct this before tomorrow at noon, to give other members an opportunity to participate!

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 05-09-2025 à 10:00:06 (S | E)
Hello !
On dirait que tout le monde a eu peur de se faire plumer …. Ne craignez rien, c’était une ( mauvaise) blague ! J’ai juste envie de chanter lorsque je vous lis ! L.humour et la plaisanterie passent mal à l.écrit … C’était juste une boutade !
Je récapitule : on indique les fautes possibles en bleu pendant deux jours, puis en vert pendant les jours suivants. à tous pour votre travail !

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de gerold, postée le 05-09-2025 à 11:24:24 (S | E)
Hello!

I was in primary school and must have been about seven years old. My teacher was known to be strict. But that year, she was pregnant, often tired and irritable, not with most of the pupils, but always with the same little girl, shy, humble, always frightened. The teacher told her off very often and, (comma) one day, she grabbed the little girl by her hair and traumatized her. I was feeling very, very bad, but I did not say anything, not even to my parents. I have never forgotten that event, which is one of my worst memories of school.

I'm not sure about what the problem with "to shock" is. Perhaps the little girl was certainly too terrified to be "shocked" (= scandalisée), but the other pupils could have been. However, dictionaries also translate "to shock" by "bouleverser", which could apply to her.

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de alouettelulu, postée le 05-09-2025 à 14:18:19 (S | E)
I was in primary school and must have been about seven years old. My teacher was known to be strict. But that year, she was pregnant, often tired and irritable, not with most of the pupils, but always with the same little girl, shy, humble, always frightened. The teacher told her offvery often and, one day, she grabbed the little girl by her hair and shook her ! I was feeling very, very bad, but I did not say anything, not even to my parents. I have never forgotten that event, which is one of my worst memories of school.

Ce n'était pas to shock, que j'ai écrit par étourderie et mal relu par étourderie également , mais to shake, shook, shaken : secouer. Bad memory, indeed !

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 05-09-2025 à 22:47:40 (S | E)
Hello!

J'avais deviné la confusion 'shock'/ 'shook' ! Ils sont souvent assimilés...

ANSWER B: (blue: 6 and 7th- Green 8th and 9th) Please indicate possible mistakes and underline what looks clumsy to you.

topic 1: Do you like gardening? what do you grow?

I love to stir the soil. When I eat fruits or vegetables I sow the seeds, or the stones and I wait for their development. Sometimes nothing grows, most often I get some small stems that etiolate very quickly, but I also have pleasant surprises and I have already harvested tomatoes and even one melon, as well as courgettes and cucumbers.
Another pleasure is creating garden spaces, for example: in a large zinc basin, I put water and a pump to make a fountain and I plant a large variety of flowers around it. I like to find in flea markets old objects that I renovate to integrate them into floral decorations and enhance a garden corner, a terrace or a balcony.
I need to have vegetation around me, even on a simple windowsill I always have aromatic plants.
Gardening, it's a hobby, of escape and happiness, every morning I come to say hello to my plants and I notice that they have grown overnight, so my day starts well.

for your help!

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 06-09-2025 à 14:06:42 (S | E)
Hello dears, (writers and readers),

If you don't have much to 'correct', try to be stricter and watch the length of sentences, the ponctuation.
Another very important point to enrich an expression is the use of link words. ('and' and 'but' are not really interesting...)

The purpose of this exercise is to help everyone improve their 'expression', therefore, do not hesitate to SUGGEST and to JUSTIFY the good constructions you've noticed.

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de gerold, postée le 07-09-2025 à 08:39:51 (S | E)
Hello!

ANSWER B: (blue: 6 and 7th- Green 8th and 9th) Please indicate possible mistakes and underline what looks clumsy to you.

topic 1: Do you like gardening? what do you grow?

I love to stir the soil. When I eat fruits or vegetables punctuation I sow the seeds, or the stones punctuation and I wait for their development. Sometimes nothing grows, most often I get some small stems that etiolate* very quickly, but I also have pleasant surprises and I have already harvested tomatoes and even one melon, as well as courgettes and cucumbers (this sentence is too long, it could be split after "quickly", and "but" could be replaced by a synonym).
Another pleasure is creating garden spaces, for example: in a large zinc basin, I put water and a pump to make (a more specific word, perhaps?) a fountain and I plant a large variety of flowers around it. I like to find in flea markets old objects that I renovate to integrate them into floral decorations and (I would use a conjunction expressing a purpose) enhance a garden corner, a terrace or a balcony.
I need to have vegetation around me, even on a simple windowsill I always have aromatic plants.
Gardening, it's a hobby, of (is this "of" correct? Anyway, I would rather use a relative clause) escape and happiness, every morning I come to say hello to my plants and xx (I would add something here and delete "so")I notice that they have grown overnight, so my day starts well.

*For some reason, my spell check doesn't like "etiolate".

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 07-09-2025 à 13:04:39 (S | E)
Hello!

Well, now, Gerold is mixing up his colours too...
Good work anyway...

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de magie8, postée le 08-09-2025 à 09:15:58 (S | E)
Hello Dears
Voici mon essai d'amélioration qui a été guidé par les précieux conseils de Gerold selon les indications de here4u

topic 1: Do you like gardening? what do you grow?

I love to stir the soil. When I eat fruits or vegetables, I sow the seeds, or the stones, then I wait for their development. Sometimes nothing grows, most often I get some small stems that etiolate* very quickly. However I also have pleasant surprises, especially I have already harvested tomatoes and even one melon, as well as courgettes and cucumbers.
Another pleasure is creating garden spaces, for example: in a large zinc basin, I put water and a pump to power a fountain and I plant a large variety of flowers around it. I like to find in flea markets old objects that I clean to integrate them into floral decorations in order to enhance a garden corner, a terrace or a balcony.
I need to have vegetation around me, even on a simple windowsill I always have aromatic plants.
Gardening, is a hobby, which give escape and happiness. Every morning I come to say hello to my plants and when I notice that they have grown overnight,() my day starts well.

s'étioler= to blanch/wither (botany= to etiolate

Je vous avouerais que je ne comprends rien aux longueurs des phrases, celle incriminée aujourd'hui avait 36 mots. Dans: "playing with the words" 60 mots sont autorisés. Dans la littérature française Victor Hugo et Marcel Proust vous offrent chacun une phrase qui dépasse 800 mots....En littérature contemporaine, la. moyenne est de 40 mots...

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