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Couple - besoin d'une correction
Message de bobii971 posté le 10-10-2009 à 20:08:51 (S | E | F)
Hello! j'aurais besoin d'une correction s'il vous plait...
This document is a photography.In the top right hand corner, we can see books, so the scene may have took placed in a Library.
The Focal point of this photography is a young couple. There are a white woman, who is wearing a white tee-shirt and a black man , who is wearing a black tee-shirt.They are huddling together. The girl is looking very happy , the man too, but he is looking embarrassed.If their parents saw them, they could have different reactions... They may have said that they are too young to be together, or the girl'parents may have been against their couple, because his lover is black, so it would be a form of racism.
By reading the title and the biographical, we can deduce, that the story may have been about marriage between a couple. Perhaps, they are lover and would want to get married , but the girl's parents wouldn't want because the man is black , there is the racism question. The man is Muslim and the girl might have went converted and these parents don't want it.
The parents could think that he get married to have the British nationality
merci, j'ai beaucoup de mal avec les temps..si vous pouvez m'expliquer ce serait sympa,
merci d'avance.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 10-10-2009 21:15
Message de bobii971 posté le 10-10-2009 à 20:08:51 (S | E | F)
Hello! j'aurais besoin d'une correction s'il vous plait...
This document is a photography.In the top right hand corner, we can see books, so the scene may have took placed in a Library.
The Focal point of this photography is a young couple. There are a white woman, who is wearing a white tee-shirt and a black man , who is wearing a black tee-shirt.They are huddling together. The girl is looking very happy , the man too, but he is looking embarrassed.If their parents saw them, they could have different reactions... They may have said that they are too young to be together, or the girl'parents may have been against their couple, because his lover is black, so it would be a form of racism.
By reading the title and the biographical, we can deduce, that the story may have been about marriage between a couple. Perhaps, they are lover and would want to get married , but the girl's parents wouldn't want because the man is black , there is the racism question. The man is Muslim and the girl might have went converted and these parents don't want it.
The parents could think that he get married to have the British nationality
merci, j'ai beaucoup de mal avec les temps..si vous pouvez m'expliquer ce serait sympa,
merci d'avance.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 10-10-2009 21:15
Réponse: Couple - besoin d'une correction de brettdallen, postée le 10-10-2009 à 21:03:23 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
J'indique ce qui ne va pas...
This document is a photography.In the top right hand corner, we can see books, so the scene may have took placed(pourquoi faire si compliqué? "may + base verbale") in a Library.
The Focal point of this photography is a young couple. There are(singulier) a white woman(ou "girl"), who is wearing a white tee-shirt and a black man , who is wearing a black tee-shirt(pronom "one").They are huddling(je choisirais le participe passé) together. The girl(ou "woman"?) is looking(present simple) very happy , the man too, but he is looking(present simple) embarrassed("à la fois").If their parents saw them, they could have different reactions... They may(au passé "modal") have said(base verbale) that they are too young to be together, or the girl'parents may(passé) have been(base verbale) against their couple, because his lover is black, so it would be a form of racism.
By reading the title(et nous, on n'y a pas droit?)(vous devez citer et expliquer ce que ce titre peut laisser entendre) and the biographical (? pourquoi un adjectif et pourquoi ce mot?), we can deduce, that the story may have been("Be" au présent) about (the)marriage
The parents(pronom) could(also) think that he("il veut se marier") get married to have the British nationality
L'ensemble est plutôt bon. Faites les corrections nécessaires et cela devrait améliorer le tout.
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