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Correction ' The slaughter of seals
Message de flo3299 posté le 17-02-2010 à 12:18:14 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous, j'ai un travail à réaliser , une affiche, où je dois je protester contre un sujet choisis. Je ne suis pas du tout sure de moi pour les fautes, Merci de m'aider
The Slaughter of Seals must end !
Each year , thousand of seals are clubbed and shot to death in comercial purpose! It has to end !
What gives the right to do such an thing ? to tear their fur off; to club their head just in front of their mother's eyes !
We, the Humane society of Canada, invite everyone at Vancouver on MArch 15th.
Together, with your help, we can show to the world the misfortune of our animals and together we can stop these murderers!
We invite you to create your own posters,slogans and editing, which we'll post on Internet! Thanks to these stuffs , we do hope that we'll be heared !
It can't go on ! We have to protest !
Message de flo3299 posté le 17-02-2010 à 12:18:14 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous, j'ai un travail à réaliser , une affiche, où je dois je protester contre un sujet choisis. Je ne suis pas du tout sure de moi pour les fautes, Merci de m'aider
The Slaughter of Seals must end !
Each year , thousand of seals are clubbed and shot to death in comercial purpose! It has to end !
What gives the right to do such an thing ? to tear their fur off; to club their head just in front of their mother's eyes !
We, the Humane society of Canada, invite everyone at Vancouver on MArch 15th.
Together, with your help, we can show to the world the misfortune of our animals and together we can stop these murderers!
We invite you to create your own posters,slogans and editing, which we'll post on Internet! Thanks to these stuffs , we do hope that we'll be heared !
It can't go on ! We have to protest !
Réponse: Correction ' The slaughter of seals de redemption, postée le 17-02-2010 à 13:40:27 (S | E)
Alors en voila quelques unes que j'ai vu:
"a thing" (ligne 3)
"in front of their mothers eyes" pour que mother soit au plurier (ligne 3)
J'en ai certainement ratées, ayant moi même un niveau faible en anglais.
Réponse: Correction ' The slaughter of seals de gerondif, postée le 17-02-2010 à 18:33:27 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
bleu = erreur vert = ajout ou correction .
The Slaughter of Seals must end !
Each year , thousand(pluriel) of seals are clubbed and shot to death in(plutôt for) comercial purpose(pluriel)! It has to end !
What gives anybody the right to do such an(an devant un son voyelle, th n'est pas un son voyelle) thing ? to tear their fur off; to club their heads just in front of their mother's(pluriel! attention au cas possessif pluriel) eyes !
We, the Humane society of Canada, invite everyone at Vancouver on MArch 15th.
Together, with your help, we can show
We invite you to create your own posters,slogans and editing, which we'll post on Internet! Thanks to these stuffs (laisser stuff au singulier, je trouve le mot un peu trop familier par ailleurs), we do hope that we'll be heared(revoir participe passé irrégulier de hear) !
It (This) can't go on ! We have to protest !
Réponse: Correction ' The slaughter of seals de flo3299, postée le 17-02-2010 à 22:07:26 (S | E)
J'ai essayé de corriger les fautes , Merci d'avance !
The Slaughter of Seals must end !
Each year , thousands of seals are clubbed and shot to death for commercials purposes)! It has to end !
What gives anybody the right to do such athing ? to tear their fur off; to club their heads just in front of their mothers' eyes !
We, the Humane society of Canada, invite everyone at Vancouver on MArch 15th.
Together, with your help, we can show the world the misfortune of our animals and together we can stop these murderers!
We invite you to create your own posters,slogans and editing, which we'll post on Internet! Thanks to these stuff , we do hope that we'll be heard!
This can't go on ! We have to protest !
Réponse: Correction ' The slaughter of seals de brettdallen, postée le 17-02-2010 à 23:33:07 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Je signale ce qui peut être amélioré...
The Slaughter of Seals must end !
Each year , thousands of seals are clubbed and shot to death for commercials purposes)! 3)It has to end !
1)What gives anybody the right to
(remettez les chose dans l'ordre! 1) 2) 3) )
We, the Humane society of Canada, invite everyone at(i'd say "in") Vancouver on MArch 15th.
Together, with your help, we can("could"/"will") show the world the misfortune of our animals and together we can stop these murderers!
We invite you to create your own posters,slogans and editing, which we'll post on Internet! Thanks to these stuff(singulier + choisiseez un autre mot! "these actions") , we do hope that we'll be heard!
This can't go on ! We have to protest !
Il y aurait bien d'autres façons d'aborder le problème et de mobiliser les troupes, mais ce n'est pas mal dans l'ensemble!
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